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Untamed Eulogy's avatar

Night, this is an absolute masterclass in star-crossed passion. One can practically feel the desperation in that goodbye kiss. Beautifully written tragedy.🖤🖤

Night Cracks's avatar

This is indeed tragic in a way, but to me, first of all it proves the power of love. All the fences, walls and divisions we build mean so little when it comes to this.

Gub's avatar

Excellent use of repetition and imagery

Night Cracks's avatar

Thank you, Gubby-buddy 💛

nina's avatar

It deserved to have its own space . 🖤

Night Cracks's avatar

It did 🖤

Thank you, nina!

Shadow Pursuit's avatar

@untamedeulogy used the words "star-crossed" which is what came to mind for me as well. Poetry that hits is my favorite thing, and this hits. 🐦‍⬛

Night Cracks's avatar

That means a lot, Shadow. Every time I write I to do my best to make my readers feel something.

Thanks for being a proof of that 🖤

Marie Terre's avatar

All of it, as if I am in their immediacy. Before this old world burning. What gift the way you write❤️

Night Cracks's avatar

Finding something like this is so rare. And yet world seems to be built upon it.

You're too kind, Marie. Thank you 💛

MoTy's avatar

Killer of the last stanza. The house is still on fire x

Night Cracks's avatar

I bet it won't stop them from building a new one.

Thank you, MoTy 🖤

MoTy's avatar

Agreed x

Martin Maenza's avatar

Night Cracks, I really like the layers and the subtext - especially between the couple - and how the attraction can overshadow all of it.

Night Cracks's avatar

It's ironic, isn't it? It makes you wanna scream 'no', but then you discover that maybe it should be like that.

Martin Maenza's avatar

Love is one of those things that can, at times, be almost impossible to understand. It is a true force of nature.

Night Cracks's avatar

And perhaps our only chance not to destroy ourselves.

Thanks for being here, Martin 🖤