This one really got to me. I love how the speaker keeps trying to justify everything until the excuses finally collapse under their own weight. It feels raw, messy, and painfully honest !
And those last two lines… damn(out of my words) They completely reframe everything that came before them. You have such a way of letting the emotion build without forcing it. Utterly gorgeous piece !! 🩷🖤
“You kept talking / until I no longer believed / my own lies.” There it is. BUSTED! By himself!
😄 And then — “it was everything / but only a kiss.” Ouch! Everything... reduced to only.
But that ending? “You knew / I’d notice you / only once you were gone.” Too bloody late.
Guilty! Messy! Haunting! I'M SUBSCRIBING!
I write at The Reflective State, meandering through reflection, humour, travel, history and fiction. If curiosity brings you my way, I'd genuinely love to know what you think.
And I wish
you were deaf enough
to miss the way
I said—
it was everything
but only a kiss.
maybe it’s body memory, maybe it’s the writer, but—
whew.
🩷
So cool. Master at this you are 🫡✨✨✨ respect
Thank you, Emmett 💛
Can you stop writing stuff that makes folks tingle?
Start writing drivel or imma have to block you.
Whew! 🔥
It tingles because it's true.
Drivel? Fine!
“Blablablabla.”
No block now, aight?
Honesty was felt in every syllable. 😉
Ayo, you forgot the “de” in the blah de blah. Uncultured swine.
I’ll let you off for now but you’re on thin ice!
You're pushing the revolution so hard...
“When she talks, I hear the revolution.
In her hips… there’s revolution.
When she walks, the revolution’s comin’!
In her kiss, watch out the revolution!”
You just reminded me of that song, you’re a ledge. Thanks! 🫡
🖤🖤🖤
The ending made me think ‘you don’t know what you got, ‘til it’s gone.’ Regretful and raw
Works for most things.
It’s our curse.
Thanks, Gub 🖤
This one really got to me. I love how the speaker keeps trying to justify everything until the excuses finally collapse under their own weight. It feels raw, messy, and painfully honest !
And those last two lines… damn(out of my words) They completely reframe everything that came before them. You have such a way of letting the emotion build without forcing it. Utterly gorgeous piece !! 🩷🖤
I think it only ends once we admit we’re lying to ourselves.
I’m really glad you liked it, Ashu.
Your comments always mean a lot 🖤🩷
“You kept talking / until I no longer believed / my own lies.” There it is. BUSTED! By himself!
😄 And then — “it was everything / but only a kiss.” Ouch! Everything... reduced to only.
But that ending? “You knew / I’d notice you / only once you were gone.” Too bloody late.
Guilty! Messy! Haunting! I'M SUBSCRIBING!
I write at The Reflective State, meandering through reflection, humour, travel, history and fiction. If curiosity brings you my way, I'd genuinely love to know what you think.
Thanks for the awesome comment, Siddhartha 🖤
I'll definitely take a peek!
You knew
I’d see you
only with my eyes closed.👍love to connect!
Hi Noor 🖤
Hello🌹🌹